As you can see, I left the spelling and grammar mistakes in the text. Whoever wrote this chapter moved from past tense, to present tense, and back to past. Also, this "chapter" could have easily been fleshed out quite a bit more, adding more suspense. Still, we were only ten, and were probably hurrying so that we could finish the book sooner. What was the rush? I guess we figured that the sooner we finished, the sooner we could publish it and make a lot of money without digging it up in some abandoned mansion frequented by crooks.
Chapter
VI - The Search for Treasure
They
woke up early in the morning. They had decided to go over to the
mansion and in the tunnels again to look for the treasure. They ate a
quick breakfast and took some more equiptment with
them this time - like shovels and ropes.
When they arrived at the mansion, they cautiously made their way to
the closet. They slipped through the trapdoor and down the stairs.
Troy said, "That passage is the one."
Just
than they hear voices
down the corridor. The DTB Cousins quickly dodge into the passageway
and start sneaking down it.
Brad, who was in the lead, dislodged a rock by accident. The rock
made a thud and the crooks, who were nearby, came to see what made
the noise.
The
DTB Cousins scrambled on, but were caught. The DTB Cousins were tied
up to stalagmights in
the main corridor.
The robbers started to take their equipment when one of them spotted
the map. The crooks took the map but forgot all about the equipment.
They left the corridor.
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